Wednesday, March 26, 2008

Moonligt Night

trying to catch sleep
seeing the moon travel
over the daffodils

1 comment:

Alan Summers said...

I really like this!

Just a thought though...

trying to catch sleep
I see the moon travel
over daffodils

I know many people don't like to see the "I" directly in a haiku, but a lot of contemporary (and classic) Japanese poets use it so why not us.