Thursday, May 1, 2008

May Day
an ominous lump on
the radiograph

5 comments:

WorkingWords100 said...

I hope it's benign. Take care

Alan Summers said...

With a very close friend with cancer this resonated with me.

all my very best, and like ww100 I hope it's benign.

Alan
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Jim Tantillo said...

thanks for the kind words. the good news, it's my dog. The bad news, it's bone cancer. But ... she's had a good life.

alternatively:

spring growth
an ominous lump on
the radiograph

Alan Summers said...

Hi Jim!

Glad you or a family member don't have cancer. Sorry to hear your dog has it, but sounds like she had a good long life full of fun.

Your second version is even better: the juxtaposition of "spring growth" and "lump" works really well.

I'd even remove this version from here and submit it to Modern Haiku or Frogpond.

all my best,

Alan
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Jim Tantillo said...

Alan, thanks, I appreciate the feedback.
jt